I know I haven't posted here in forever, forums, but I'm not starting a new topic. sorry-not-sorry.
Alright, welp, Chapter 9 is completed. At least until the next round of edits. I am... More pleased with this chapter than I thought I'd be but there is a little bit of back and forth between locations here that I'm unsure if it's distracting or confusing or whatever. >.>
You tell me. Also a lot of set up in this chapter. I hope some of it comes through. ^^
First of all... I think there's a good sense of things gradually coming to light in regards to plot. And the idea of the characters slowly becoming involved in it. I think that's a good progression. I'm very interested to see how Arial and I'den meeting will go. ^^
Arial and Adaellae's entire interaction made my day.
And I can't wait for Arial and Ceamath banter, tbh.
The bit with the landlady was super sad and I wasn't expecting it to be that sad. :|
My bad? :/
The governor is an asshole. >.>
Good, he's an antagonist ;)
Also, what does the token thing mean? I mean, I get the gist of it, but...? ^.-
I was like, "What's a shorthand way of saying, 'I'll give you this thing to prove I'mma do this other thing'?" and my brain went with token. There's probably a better way of describing it or a better word, but honestly when I was editing my brain glossed right over it :P
I like the title. I think it's fitting. Also, that was a very nice troll there at the end. XP
I really enjoyed this chapter. I don't know what else to say about it really. Adaellae has a very strong personality and it shows. The narrative felt very concise which seems to fit her as the focus of the chapter and the situation overall. Good stuff. :)
And about linking the story instead of posting. Welp, it's up to you. I'll follow along whatever you decide. ^^
@typical_demigod I juuusssst fixed it. It was some formattting from italics that didn't transfer over.
Also the good news is that since Sam and I aren't going to be posting public chapters anymore and instead sending them straight to you, there's going to be less annoying format fiddling to do to make it appear correctly here.
We have about up to chapter 7 or 8 written and we're working on getting those edited. More to come for you two (and whoever else wants to can PM me) soon.